A Boy In A Circus
Once upon a time, there was a very active and funny boy named Boss. He loved to go to the circus and lucky for him, he was very rich. He loved it so much that he actually went to every circus around the world for 13 years and never missed any of the circuses! At the circus, he would go and participate in every activity and bring out all the fun he has inside. He would often blabber nonstop on a ride which somehow influences others to follow and blabber too! You can say that, any ride with him on, would be the loudest and most fun ride. His rule is to do everything and eat everything at least twice.............
Whenever a circus closes down for some apparent reason, he would not do anything else other than staying home. Some may call him a Circus freak or an extremely happy and active person whenever there is a circus, but whenever there is no circus, he would be so bored and would get a little sick, actually sick of staying home and doing nothing......
Thats it
Bui Thanh Tung a.k.a The Hello Kitty Team leader
My comments on my partner's proofreading on my work.
USELESS! THAT PERSON DIDN'T EVEN CIRCLED ONE WORD!!!BUT BUT BUT......that person did understand my story pretty well and understood how i felt about school from my story. Thank you very much ^^
Now this is PROFFESIONAL work!
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